Happy Friday, fictioneers! This Friday Fictioneers is courtesy of Madison Woods. Thank you to Lora for supplying a most interesting photo for the prompt.
I really stumbled on this challenge. I had several ideas to write about…from being followed in the park to the statue, to listening to a old woman talking about a memory, to the statue taking flight, to a woman waiting for a lover (by the statue) who never showed. Seeing this statue in the darkness definitely had some bearing.
I really don’t know how I settled on this one. Anyway, it’s pretty skeleton. Enjoy and happy Friday. (No, I don’t know what’s in the vial. Maybe you have some ideas.)
Image courtesy of Lora Mitchell
Meeting Place (101/100)
“Did you deliver it?” Jude asked.
My hands were shaking. The delivery item pressed delicately against my hip bone in my jean pocket. I revealed the vial, admitting my failure.
Jude bolted from the table and seized my neck in a choke hold. “Do you think this is some kind of game?”
“I didn’t see him. There was blood…smears. On the statue.”
“Maybe it was jelly,” Randy piped up.
“Shut up,” Jude snapped. “We need to go back.”
When we returned, it was dark and deserted. The statue emanated a translucent glow. There was no evidence of blood anywhere.
very nice :). Maybe some sort of potent potion in the vial. I like your take on the challenge
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Thanks, Boomie! And, thanks for the idea.
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You’re right, there are striking similaritiies between our two stories. It’s funny, because when I wrote mine, I had no idea where it came from, but I was pretty sure nobody else would write anything like it. Wrong. I guess great minds just think alike. Ha. However, your story has a grittiness and tension that distinguishes it from mine. It’s a dark glimpse into another world, and I really liked it. Ron
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Thank you, Ron. Like you, I didn’t really expect this story. Funny how a beautiful statue evoked all this pain, sadness, and, well….blood 🙂 I enjoyed your story, as well.
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Fascinating story! I wonder what was in the vial, and who it was they were looking for. Makes my imagination run wild with possibilities.
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Gripping story, B.F!
It has a fascinating kind of… spy-thriller vibe to me! If you didn’t intend it to read that way part of that might be my own doing (I tend to subconsciously ‘007’ a lot of things, you know)!
– The name is Guy… SpilledInkGuy
🙂
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Thanks, Guy….SpilledInkGuy! Thanks for you kind words. It could definitely go the spy direction. I’ve always enjoyed the spy story myself. I think 007 is coming out with a new movie this fall. Isn’t he?
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Very cool! I hadn’t heard! I’m kind of looking forward to that now! 🙂
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so then we need to figure out how the blood turned to something translucent…
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The vial reminds me of the glass vial my insulin came in when I was a kid. The blood? Easy, my hands are always covered in it after testing my blood sugars with a little prick to the tip of my finger. They were rushing to get some Diabetic friend his vial of insulin, he was testing his blood sugars and when he brushed off the statue he smeared some blood on it. An old lady was passing by and tutted under her breath as she wiped what she thought was ketchup from the idle hands of a bored teenager.
Case solved. 🙂
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Perfect! I knew you could solve this story for me. I just didn’t want the boring drugs (because that’s dull). Insulin…now that’s something different. Thanks for your insight. 🙂
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All that and i forgot to say Great Story.
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Thank you, J.D.
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the start of a good mystery. So many things to know. I am hooked! Well done.
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Thank you. Thanks for reading.
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Well, obviously it’s a deadly secret. Hmm. Drops from the Fountain of Youth? Or maybe, as Boomie Bol suggests, a potion.
Great story. I love the suspense, and I’m curious about what happens next.
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Thank you. Fountain of Youth always has possibilities, doesn’t it? Thanks for you nice comments!
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Very intriguing!
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Stories like this are intriguing and make me want to read more. 🙂
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Hitchcockian.
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I’m intrigued. You did a good job setting the tone. There’s more to this story than meets the eye.
Thanks for your kind comments on mine, Amy.
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Wow, lots of questions and lots of intrigue. Who is the vial for? What was on the statue and why is it gone? I like the power dynamic that’s playing out between these characters (with Randy providing comic relief of course). Nicely done
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Thanks for your nice comments, Brian. Indeed, I would have a lot to answer for if I continued with this. Thanks for your feedback. I do appreciate it.
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Maybe the potion in the vial would make the statue come alive. Would that be interesting?
You left us with a lot of good questions unanswered. Very intriguing.
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That could be very interesting! Thanks for the suggestion. Thanks for your kind words.
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Hmm…this is a good one. Would love to see how Agatha Christie or Sherlock Holmes (even Angela Lansbury) would solve this mystery. Let’s have more.
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Thank you so much, Lora!
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Not all that can be said has been, but neither have you revealed all that could be. A nice story with enough mystery to keep us coming back.
Aloha,
Doug
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Thanks for letting me camp out in your blog for a little while today. I had a great time and tried to leave my campsite as good as when I arrived. I’ll be back!
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Hey, anytime. I hope enjoyed it! Everything is in good order. You’re a very considerate camper. Thanks for the visit. Come back anytime.
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