Rendezvous – Friday Fictioneers – 10/26/12

Welcome, Friday Fictioneers. Many thanks to the lovely Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for hosting and leading this group. Today’s photo prompt has been provided by Rochelle.

If you would like to participate please follow this link. The challenge is to write 100 words of fiction, either as a story or poetry, in response to the photo prompt. You may be surprised what you come up with. Give it a try!

I have a 103 words in the form of a story. Comments welcome. Click here to read more Friday Fictioneers stories.

Photo courtesy of Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Rendezvous

“Coffee?” the waitress asked.

“Please,” she said. “Oh, can you make it two? I have a friend meeting me.”

He was late, which wasn’t like him. It wasn’t as if he didn’t know this place. This was where they had shared a bowl of tomato bisque. Her eyes had transfixed on his blue ones, as he slurped down spoonfuls. They filled the empty spaces with nervous laughing, brushing their knees under the table. She rested her shoes on top of his and he squeezed her hand.

She embraced the memory with a heavy yearning. The waitress returned with coffee to an empty table.

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55 thoughts on “Rendezvous – Friday Fictioneers – 10/26/12

  1. Hi Amy,
    Great story of heartbreak. Your words tell us how into him she was, even though he did slurp. Your story was just right for the photo. Sorry to endanger you in my story. I was reading a novel, One Foot In Eden, by Ron Rash and one of the main characters was named Amy. I recommend it. Ron

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  2. It sounds as though this won’t have a happy ending, unfortunately. I enjoyed the story but this broke the smoothness a tiny bit–” It’s not as if “. “It wasn’t as if” would fit with the rest of your tenses. Again, “This is where they had shared “…”This was where…”. A small thing compared to the quality of your story but something easily made better. 🙂

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  3. This: “She rested her shoes on top of his and he squeezed her hand.”

    Oh, I know that feeling. That something solid beneath one’s feet. I love that and you captured it all in 100 words. Sheesh. And I thought I was doing well with making it under 450! I don’t think I could do anything in 100 words! Good for you, Bumble! 😉

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    1. Thanks, Renee! Well, I attempt to capture something in 100 words. I guess there’s not a lot of wiggle room. I’m sure you would come up with something. You should try it sometime. I’ve found it very motivating for my writing. Thanks for reading and for your nice comments!

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  4. Bittersweet. It brings back memories for we did the same thing when we dined out in casual places… with the same blue and white tablecloth. That romance didn’t last either but the memories are sweet.

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