I’m just barely squeezing it in today, but it’s still Friday where I am. It’s time for Friday Fictioneers, courtesy of Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. Thank you, Rochelle, for providing today’s photo.
Please don’t judge too harshly. With the NaNo writing challenge, I’m feeling a little depleted.
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Copyright – Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
Ice Cave (100)
Danny felt the chill of the glass, and he rubbed his fingers in a circular motion.
“Oh, don’t touch the crystals,” Henry blurted. “If you do, they will start multiplying and cover our entire house. We’ll be in an ice cave, turn into ice sculptures, and be frozen until the end of time.”
Danny withdrew his hand from the window and stared at his older brother, wide-eyed.
“Just drink your cocoa,” Henry stated.
Danny positioned his hands around his mug. “What if I could melt the crystals with my warm hand?”
“Don’t even try. They always come back,” Henry whispered.
Big brothers… Aargh! My older brothers did this sort of things to me… Calling me scary names and all. Like this much
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Thanks, Boomie! Me, too. Sometimes I said scary things to my little sister, too. Luckily, she’s forgiven me!
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Glad you made it, Amy. I like the ordinary scary tone of your story, something we’ve probably all experienced at some point. Enjoy your weekend and your novel writing.
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Thanks, Janet. I glad you enjoyed it!
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Aw, yes, the stories I used to fall for compliments of my older siblings. Sounds very familiar. 🙂
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Thanks, Carrie. Were you the youngest? I had a younger sister. I told a few stories myself. I was always surprised how she fell for them. 🙂
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I was a middle child.
🙂
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Oh, the complicated middle child! Just kidding 🙂
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It’s no mystery why we middle children are conflict avoiders. 🙂
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sounds something like we can all relate to if we have siblings. 🙂
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I think it’s part of the fun in having them, too. That, and of course, all the fighting and hair pulling. Ah, siblings.
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No harsh judgments here, this was very sweet! I didn’t have siblings but I’ve heard enough stories about the mind games.
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Thanks, Weebs! You’re very sweet. Oh, yes, the mind games. I’m afraid I played a few on my youngest sister. I believe it had something to do with a doll and how this doll didn’t love her anymore. I was such a brat! We still talk about it!
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This is good stuff. Nicely done dialog
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Thanks, Lucas! I appreciate it.
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Big brothers are always kind and caring.. Just ask my little sister 🙂
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Oh, do you think I should? Hmm…yeah, I know. I had a younger sister, too. 🙂
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That’s a great scene~
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Thank you, David.
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Dear Amy,
Me thinks they’re going to end up in an ice cave. i could not resist testing every limit my older brother arbitraily set forth. lovely story that captured the magic of childhood perfectly.
Aloha,
Doug
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Dear Doug,
Thank you, kind sir. If the little brother tests this one, indeed, he will see that they come back. Poor thing. He’ll be in fear for who knows how many years to come. Thanks for your kind comments.
Aloha,
Amy
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Hi Amy,
Glad you could make it. it’s never too early or too late with this group. Your story brought back memories for me, too. For me it was my brother and my cousin. Both were six years older than I and the one thing they ever agreed on was torturing me. Good dialogue.
shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks, Rochelle! I’m glad I made. It’s always rewarding when I put forth the effort, and sometimes, I end up liking what I wrote 🙂 I had five siblings so it’s something I definitely grew up with. Six years older, huh? Oh, I hope they weren’t cruel.
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Love the speech choices-blurted, stated, whispered. That Henry.
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Thank you. I hope they worked. Thanks for you nice comments.
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I would have touched them and become an ice sculpture, I’m too curious.
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Oh, Leo! I would have, too. Besides turning into an ice sculpture sounds cool. It’s the frozen part that might be difficult. Oh, yeah, and that it’s forever! Thanks for reading.
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Hi Amy,
Are you a Kurt Vonnegut fan? Because this really reminded me of Ice 9 in Cat’s Cradle. Thanks for reading and commenting on my story. Ron
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Hi Ron, I’ve never read Cat’s Cradle. I’d like to check it out. Thanks for the tip. – Amy
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Amy,
Loved the story…I had older brothers and they teased me so often by the age of four I stopped believing them or at least that’s what I kept telling them…
Tom
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Thanks, Tom! Right, it’s all about appearances…Thanks for reading.
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Hi Amy,
I’m just letting you know I nominated you for the Very Inspiring Blog Award.
Check it out at http://mariwells.wordpress.com/
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Hi Mari! Thank you so much for this! I really appreciate it. It’s so nice to be recognized!
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You’re welcome. It is very nice to be recognized. 🙂
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Is the brother kidding? Guess you’ll have to make it longer so we’ll know. Great job.
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Yes, he’s kidding! I tried to comment on yours and it won’t accept it. Here’s my comment for yours: Great story, Shirley. I like how she’s trying to be composed for her daughter’s sake, and then, the tears when she sees the Sheriff.
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The brother is bratty for sure…but has quite the imagination. Have a feeling he’s going to grow up to be a writer and spin all sorts of wild stories…may even join FFers.
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Hi Lora. Ha ha…maybe. That crazy kid! Thanks for reading. – Amy
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Loved it, B.F!
Not that I would have done this sort of thing. 😉
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Thanks, SIG! I’m not so sure I believe you. 😉
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Ohhhh. Haunting. Well done. My lighter story is here: http://banterwithbeth.blogspot.com
P.S. I had to check out your story since my daughter is named Amy!
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Hi Beth! Thank you. Oh, what a great name your daughter has!! I’ll be sure to read your story. Thanks for sharing it.
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