Voices – Friday Fictioneers – 12/07/12

It’s time for Friday Fictioneers, brought to you by our gracious host, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. Today’s photo was provided by Rich Vosa. My 100 words comes to you as story. Initially, I went over with this one, so I did some cutting. The end is, well, your interpretation.

Click here for more stories related to this prompt. As always, your participation is welcome. Why not try it out?

Copyright – Rich Voza

Voices (100)

At the third door, they heard sobbing. Two doors further, they listened to mumbling in words beyond recognition. Across from this door, a man yelled, “I told you to stop it.”

At the end of the hall, an unmarked door lead to another hallway. The corridor adjusted itself for re-engagement, the crying, mumbling, and the yelling, until the sunlight grew dim and darkness cloaked around them.

Annie pounded with her fists. “I know you’re in there.”

“We already tried,” Henry sighed.

Behind a wall sat two men at a monitor. “Haven’t they had enough?” relented the younger man.

“No. Almost.”

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81 thoughts on “Voices – Friday Fictioneers – 12/07/12

  1. oooh, well done. there are dozens of reasons this could be happening, but i don’t think any of them are good things. thanks for the tension. and it seems they were in there a long time. their sanity will wear down soon, if not already.

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      1. it’s a hotel corridor of a beautiful building in mexico where i stayed about a month ago. the inside was strange, but the outside is beautiful. on the ocean in cancun.

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  2. oh my how eerie Amy. I loved it! Makes one wonder. I think I won’t be going in anyplace that has a lot of doors. Too creepy. 🙂

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  3. I am intrigued and would like to know more. It seems a little between “The Shining” and “One Flew Over The Cuckoo”s Nest”. Yes, I would settle in for a good nerve wracking piece.

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    1. Thanks, Michelle. I amazed at how this little bit is recalling a lot of different stories for people, most of them horror stories. I’ll never forget the hallway scene full of blood in “The Shining.” Anyway, I’m thinking about pursuing the story further. We’ll see! Thanks for your nice comments.

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    1. Thank you, Ted! I liked yours, too. I tried to comment but I’m sure it took it. I liked the way you set yours up with the calling. I thought that was an effective set up, a good reason to be drawn to the place. Happy Birthday, too!

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  4. Your writing is like a corridor in that it always draws me in, B.F!
    Okay… that was supposed to sound much better…
    but… you know… (I suspect you’ve come to expect this sort of thing from me, B.F.)…
    🙂

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  5. I’m new to Friday Fictioneers and I’m trying to make the rounds to see how other people are using the prompts – this reminds me of something I heard on Dark Matters (Science Channel) about a psychology experiment in the 70’s where a college professor made some of his students act as prisoners and some as guards to determine how power affects the mob mentality. In the end, even the professor, who was the “warden” was too into it and the school had to pull the plug – after only 4 or 5 days. You’ve captured the creepy essence of this very well for only having 100 words.

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    1. Oh, thank you! I’ve watched that show a couple of times. It’s interesting! I’m sure you’ve noticed how different all the stories are that relate to this prompt. That’s the fun thing about this group. If you’re interested, you should definitely try it out.

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      1. I agree – I love seeing how people interpret it differently. For me the challenge isn’t as much the 100 words as it is trying to think of the different ways to look at the photo. I think I’m going to stick with this for a while. Good luck with your writing:)

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