It’s time for Friday Fictioneers, brought to you by our gracious host, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. Today’s photo was provided by Rich Vosa. My 100 words comes to you as story. Initially, I went over with this one, so I did some cutting. The end is, well, your interpretation.
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Copyright – Rich Voza
Voices (100)
At the third door, they heard sobbing. Two doors further, they listened to mumbling in words beyond recognition. Across from this door, a man yelled, “I told you to stop it.”
At the end of the hall, an unmarked door lead to another hallway. The corridor adjusted itself for re-engagement, the crying, mumbling, and the yelling, until the sunlight grew dim and darkness cloaked around them.
Annie pounded with her fists. “I know you’re in there.”
“We already tried,” Henry sighed.
Behind a wall sat two men at a monitor. “Haven’t they had enough?” relented the younger man.
“No. Almost.”
Reminiscent of Cabin In The Woods. Very well done.
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Thank you, Paul.
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Nicely done – very atmospheric. I liked the idea of the corridor ‘adjusting itself for re-engagement’.
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Thank you, Sandra!
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Very mysterious. I’d like to read a longer version of this 🙂
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Thanks, David! I definitely could expand this one. Maybe I’ll try to do it.
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I definitely agree. I want to see more!
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Thanks, H.L.! I think I could definitely move ahead with this one. Lots of possibilities.
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For some reason “corridor adjusted itself for re-engagement,” reminds me, just a little bit, of Hitchhikers Guide to the Galaxy. Kudos on writing an intriguing Friday tale 🙂
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Thank you, Jess. That’s a nice compliment. I think there’s something shifty about this corridor 🙂
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REDRUM-REDRUM
I was waiting for the twins at the end of the corridor.
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Right…who can forget the twins. They’re forever etched in my memory….
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oooh, well done. there are dozens of reasons this could be happening, but i don’t think any of them are good things. thanks for the tension. and it seems they were in there a long time. their sanity will wear down soon, if not already.
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Thank you, Rich. I’m happy to have provided some tension for you today. I’m your tension gal! Now, you can tell me what this picture is….and I want to tell you I think it’s a very good prompt.
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it’s a hotel corridor of a beautiful building in mexico where i stayed about a month ago. the inside was strange, but the outside is beautiful. on the ocean in cancun.
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Of course, Mexico! No, I had no idea. I’m just a little jealous. Just hanging out by the ocean in Cancun….Looks lovely.
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i wonder if this link will work
view from the room
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Nada. No cigar….Are you trying to rub it in?!
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no, but that might be a result.
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Oh, nice hotel by the ocean…must be nice. Someday, someday…
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This has troubling shades..could be set sometime in the future,,or time could also be the same as space…subject to change. I liked your genre there, very much.
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Thank you, Pirate. I like your ideas. I haven’t given it too much thought beyond what I’ve written. Lots to consider. Thanks for your nice comments.
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No bumbling around on this! You did it perfectly.
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Thanks, Janet. I’m glad you think so.
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Wow. All I can say is Wow!
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Thank you, Mari! I appreciate it.
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Messing with Annie’s and Henry’s minds, they are. I’m intrigued by whose these men at the monitor are. They don’t seem very nice. 😉
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Thank you, Carrie. You’re right on the money there. Not nice at all. Thanks for reading 🙂
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Ooooh I like the chilling feel this gave. You’re really good with these prompts. I’ll have to try one.
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Thanks, La La! Oh, you should definitely do it. They’re a lot of fun! If anything, a good writing exercise. Sometimes, I think I have no idea what to write, but manage to come up with something!
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Awesome, I will. Writing exercises are always good for development. 🙂
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Good deal. I look forward to it! If you have any questions, just give me a holler. 🙂
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oh my how eerie Amy. I loved it! Makes one wonder. I think I won’t be going in anyplace that has a lot of doors. Too creepy. 🙂
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Thanks, Jackie. I’m actually always creeped out in hallways. They make me think of weird things.
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Creep factor is right. If that was your intention then I’d say you have achieved it. Well done. *Shivers*
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Thanks, Debra. Yeah, creepy works for me here.
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I see a nightmarish experiment going on here. But it has long left psychology and gone to torture. Loved the read 🙂
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Thanks and thanks for reading! I think I would go crazy here.
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Mysterious and tense … yet I left still wondering. 🙂
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Thanks, Frank! Thanks for reading. 🙂
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Interesting to read yours and Rich’s back to back.
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So different, huh? That’s what I love about this group! You really never know what you’re going to read. Everyone has a different take.
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yep …. and it goes with the challenge. It’s now fun to read two of them!
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Made me feel like I was watching the beginning of a horror film.
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Ooohh, are you scared? Thanks, Jen!
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WOW – this would make a great start to a novel. Well done, very intriguing! 😀
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Thank you so much, Dianne!
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Creepy read. So many places to go with this one. Makes you want to read more. An excellent job.
Tom
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really well done, you have the root of a TV series…. I would read a longer version of this.
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Some type of psychological experiment? Well done.
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Perhaps. Thanks, R.E.!
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Dear Amy,
Worse than waterboarding. You may have hit on something to license to the CIA. Good story.
Aloha,
Doug
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Thank you, Doug. I always appreciate your nice comments. In this case, I’m glad to come up with something worse than waterboarding.
Aloha,
Amy
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Reminds me of the movie “Dark City”. Well done.
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Oh, right. I remember that movie. I’ll take that as a compliment because I liked that one. Thanks!
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Hi Amy,
A rather disturbing little piece of something bigger going on. Well written and drew me in.
shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks, Rochelle. I may try to develop this one further for fun! Thanks for your nice comments.
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I am intrigued and would like to know more. It seems a little between “The Shining” and “One Flew Over The Cuckoo”s Nest”. Yes, I would settle in for a good nerve wracking piece.
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Thanks, Michelle. I amazed at how this little bit is recalling a lot of different stories for people, most of them horror stories. I’ll never forget the hallway scene full of blood in “The Shining.” Anyway, I’m thinking about pursuing the story further. We’ll see! Thanks for your nice comments.
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Hi Amy,
I thought about writing something very similar to this. Must have been channeling. This sounds like something the CIA would be in charge of. Dark, but fascinating. Ron
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Hi Ron,
Thank you! I think this prompt has endless possibilities. No only can the corridor be endless, but there are all the doors, too, Thanks for reading,
Amy
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Wow.. This reminded me of Hunger Games somehow. Very interesting!
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Thanks, Parul. You know, I haven’t even read Hunger Games. Maybe I should. Thanks!
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Love this. Reminds me of Cabin In The Woods.
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Thank you, J.D. I haven’t seen that one! I’ll make sure I see it now. You’re the second person who’s told me this. I think there are so many possibilities with this one!
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Liked ‘two men at a monitor’… and the pounding with fists. Desperation exasperation maybe panic…
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Thank you, Ted! I liked yours, too. I tried to comment but I’m sure it took it. I liked the way you set yours up with the calling. I thought that was an effective set up, a good reason to be drawn to the place. Happy Birthday, too!
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Thanks for the wishes. I was trying to do 2nd person pov.
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Ah…that’s hard to do, isn’t it? I usually avoid that one. Good for you to give yourself a challenge! Well done.
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Another wonderfully intriguing snippet of fiction. Nicely done.
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Why thank you so much. That truly makes me smile 🙂
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Your writing is like a corridor in that it always draws me in, B.F!
Okay… that was supposed to sound much better…
but… you know… (I suspect you’ve come to expect this sort of thing from me, B.F.)…
🙂
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No, it’s sounds great, SIG! Thanks the kind words. You’re very encouraging!
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Very good. I have seen lots of these Friday fictioneer things. I like fiction, but writing something short – I can’t even write short comments. See?
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Well, now that’s the challenge. I like doing it and seeing what everyone else does with the prompt. It’s fun. You should try it some time.
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X-Files meets Twilight Zone meets Cabin in the Woods, and in a hundred words! Awesome!
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Thank you so much, Kathy! I really need to watch this Cabin in the Woods. I’ve never seen it. Thanks for your nice comments.
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I’m new to Friday Fictioneers and I’m trying to make the rounds to see how other people are using the prompts – this reminds me of something I heard on Dark Matters (Science Channel) about a psychology experiment in the 70’s where a college professor made some of his students act as prisoners and some as guards to determine how power affects the mob mentality. In the end, even the professor, who was the “warden” was too into it and the school had to pull the plug – after only 4 or 5 days. You’ve captured the creepy essence of this very well for only having 100 words.
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Oh, thank you! I’ve watched that show a couple of times. It’s interesting! I’m sure you’ve noticed how different all the stories are that relate to this prompt. That’s the fun thing about this group. If you’re interested, you should definitely try it out.
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I agree – I love seeing how people interpret it differently. For me the challenge isn’t as much the 100 words as it is trying to think of the different ways to look at the photo. I think I’m going to stick with this for a while. Good luck with your writing:)
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Thanks! I look forward to seeing you at the Fictioneers!
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