The Wave – Friday Fictioneers – 01/25/13

It’s time for Friday Fictioneers, courtesy of our gracious host Rochelle. Thank you to Renee Homan Heath for the beautiful photo.

I pared this down from 160 word, so here’s what I have.

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Copyright-Renee Homan Heath

A splash hits our knees, spraying salt water in our faces. My son drops my hand and dives into the breakers. When I reach him, he is floating and bobbing.

A wave curls behind us in one breath, poised to inhale us. I grab my son’s hand, and the salty sting engulfs us. I lose my grip of him as I thrash against the sand.

Bewildered and shaken, I emerge from the sea foam. My son is nowhere.

Across the rippling waves, a tiny frame wrestles in the water. I reach for my son’s hand. Wide-eyed and grinning, he says, “Let’s do it again.”

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77 thoughts on “The Wave – Friday Fictioneers – 01/25/13

    1. Thank you, Smaktakula. It is a beautiful photo, isn’t it? I love these little paths and bridges. It’s true, they are finite. Now, he needs me less to go out in the water and will go out by himself. So, this is really special when I consider this.

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  1. Dear Amy,
    OMG! You had my heart racing. Between the genre tag of autobiography and the first part of the story, you were recounting how you’d lost a child. So relieved. And, I might add, so well written!
    Shalom,
    Rochelle

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    1. Thanks, David. We don’t go to the beach nearly enough. Hopefully, we’ll go more in the future. My older son absolutely loves it, as you can see. No fear at all. I love the picture, too. I always enjoy these little paths.

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    1. Thank you, Frank. Great! I was hoping it would be a little bit of a rollercoaster. It’s hard to know when it is as short as it is. Thanks for that. My son has no fear and loves extreme stuff, so I think you could be right about him being a Guapo adventurer. He even wants to live in Hawaii.

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  2. Amy,
    This so reminds me of how my girlfriend is with her kids at the beach. Waves are fun but also need to be respected. Learning how to play in waves and be safe is a life saving lesson for anyone. You captured that moment, of teaching your child and struggling with your own fears of putting him in dangers way… perfectly. I was also misdirected several times thinking something else was going on… ” A wave curls behind us in one breath, poised to inhale us.” had me thinking maybe it was a shark but in fact it’s was a wave. Plus him being lost and his excited enthusiasm to do it again was priceless. My favorite this week!

    I only do this once a week, at best……..The hat is off and I bow to you.

    Tom

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    1. Tom,
      Thanks! I think you state it perfectly here about respecting the waves and knowing I guess the limits and how much danger you will put yourself in. It’s hard for a fearless kid to comprehend sometimes. It also lets me re-experience some of the joys I had as kid in the water now as a parent. It’s sweet when he wants me to go out with him, although getting wiped out is bit rough!

      I’m thrilled by your comments! I struggled with some of this, as I had a lot of material to work with, which isn’t always the case.It made all my effort worthwhile. Thank you so much. I appreciate it.

      Amy

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  3. Hi Amy
    What a fantastic story! A proper rollercoaster ride too – you had me scared when you lost your son – I was so relieved when he was fine and happy. Why do our kids do that do us????

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  4. I was with you all the way there. Although the same event through your son’s eyes would have lacked the drama. If only our kids could read this and then maybe, possibly even perhaps, they would understand their parents, even just a little.
    Splojo.

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  5. Very nicely done, B.F!
    A perfect description of wandering into the waves! I always forget how strong they are. I don’t ‘float’ very well, so I never go very far out, but I almost always wind-up on my back-side just the same!
    🙂

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  6. I had a similar experience holding my young son in the surf. The wave was overpowering. i couldn’t hold on to him. Luckily he wasn’t hurt badly. I got slightly banged up, but the anguish was terrible. The waves are stronger than any of us.

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