It’s time for Friday Fictioneers. Thank you to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for leading this group.
Two very important trees in my life had to be chopped down. My story isn’t about this, as I decided to go in a different direction. While I did spend many a summer afternoon up in a tree, this is purely fiction.
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Genre: Literary Fiction (101 words)
From Scott Vanatter with permission-Copyright- Indira
First Crush
Under a lush canopy of green, we nest in our separate corners wiling away sticky, hot afternoons. We share a mango ice from an orange peel. Our lips touch in impulse. To your surprise, I accept a dare and reveal small, handfuls of flesh. You smile and nod.
We drift when I have a boyfriend, but you rescue me as my homecoming date.
On a street corner in the city, you promise good news.
“Who’s the lucky girl?”
“His name is Joe,” you say, your eyes searching mine.
“Of course,” my eyes moist.
“Don’t worry, Charlotte. You’ll always be my girl.”
Oh this is just adorable! Put a smile on my face! 🙂
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Thanks, Nandini! Oh, that makes me smile!
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Nice one. Friends are special. 🙂 and they are there no matter what.
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Thanks, Jackie. I like your thinking!
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Besties forever! The best kind of friendship.
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Ah, yes!! True friends to the end. We all need friends like this, huh?
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Short, sweet and I’m tearing up. I hate when that happens.
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Ah, shucks, He Who….Hey, anytime!! Thanks.
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Love it! Just, love it!
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Thank you so much, Amber.
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a moment in time when two friends share a bit of heart talk…♥. lovely!
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Thank you, Sunshine. What are friends for but for special moments?
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oh, you’re welcome and i agree, precious are platonic friendships especially during the down times in our lives. ♥
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Good friends are priceless.
janet
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So true, Janet. Everyone needs good friends in life.
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Really like it! Especially that it was irrelevant to her that it was a him.
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Thanks, Guapo. I’m glad you enjoyed it!
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Aww… I just really love this. So sweet, Amy.
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Thanks, Lisa. I appreciate that.
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A wonderful story of friendship.
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Thank you!
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I feel the twinge of regret making this such an honesty story. Likely a milestone in male/female friendships. Nicely done.
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Thank you, Maggie. I appreciate that.
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Lovely story of friendship and true acceptance.
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Thank you, Erin. I’m glad you enjoyed it.
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There is nothing like a bestie.
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No doubt. Thanks, Stephen.
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I really liked this. An original take on the prompt too.
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Thanks, Sandra.
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Beautiful – always best of friends 😀
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I like to think so. Thanks, Dianne.
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This is a wonderful tale of innocence and discovery – I loved the small handfuls of flesh. I’m smiling all over 🙂
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Cool! I love to make to you smile. Thank you!
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True friends will love us to the end.
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I hope so. Thanks, Joe.
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Dear Amy,
My best friend in HS was a guy. We spent a lot of time together talking and sharing dreams. It surprised a few when he was the best man and not the groom at my wedding.
Nicely told story of friendship.
Shalom,
Rochelle
PS We’re still friends.
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Dear Rochelle,
Oh, thanks for sharing your story with me. I wish I had a guy friend like that! That’s great you’re still friends. Some friendships are meant to last! Thank you.
Shalom,
Amy
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Ok Wow. That’s a lot in a little.Nicely done Amy.
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Thanks, Shalagh. I do my best. Glad you liked it!
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Good stuff Amy! A gentle, wistful piece with a soft twist.
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Thank you, Nick! I’m glad you enjoyed it.
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Beautiful and touching. Well done!
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Thank you, Hook! Thanks for you lovely comments.
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Loved this, Amy. It speaks of special friends.
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Thank you, Cathy! I appreciate that. I don’t know what I would do without my friends.
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Brilliant! It was amazing how you fitted that in, I felt like I had read a much longer story, my mind filling in the gaps through your subtle hints. A fine example of how to do this genre. 🙂
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I appreciate that! Thank you. Thanks for your thoughtful comments and for your feedback.
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Beautiful.
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Thanks, Mari! Are you still doing the Fictioneers? I was just curious.
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I haven’t done it for a while. Reading and commenting on everyone’s post began to take so long, I was overwhelmed.
I hope to start again as soon as my life relaxes a bit.
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I totally understand! It can be overwhelming. I don’t come close to reading everyone’s stories. Hope things are more relaxing soon, Mari.
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Lovely story! I’d like to catch Charlotte on the rebound though.
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Ha ha, Perry! Thank you. I’m sure Charlotte is out there somewhere!
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A lovely story, done with details that reach beyond the story… of the kiss by impulse, that her first crush turns out to be gay, and her moist eyes. Very well written to wrap these details in a sweet story.
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Thanks a lot. I appreciate your lovely comments.
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This is a great story, with some many different facets in such a small space. I like the way you told it, with short simple sentences. Great job (as usual). 🙂
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Thanks, David! I see you got your badge! Was it in the widgets?
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Yeah, it was in there, so I just did it that way. I had snagged a copy from yours, but didn’t need it. 🙂
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that was a touching story. Enjoyed it.
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Thank you, Bill.
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you might have called it second crush too 🙂
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Oh, nice idea! I like that. Thanks.
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that’s the fun of a writer’s circle. I’m glad you liked it.
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Excellent capturing the young heart and the passage of time.
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Thanks, Frank. I appreciate it.
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Great story. Very touching sentiment.
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Thank you, Russell.
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Very true to life.
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Thanks!
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There’s something so nostalgic about this piece, B.F… it’s wonderful!
Hahaha… and while I know this is fiction it’s probably best I don’t remember too much about my crushes growing-up! Something tells me it would all be pretty embarrassing… like falling OUT of a tree in an attempt to ‘impress’ someone! Hahaha… wait a minute… this might explain a few things!
🙂
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Hahahah….I would love to hear some growing up stories from you! Maybe falling out of a tree was a good thing for you, huh? I’m sure there’s someone out there who has a fond memory or two of this. I’m glad you enjoyed it!
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you carried us all down our own personal memory lane with so few vivid words Amy–a well crafted , sweet ride
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Audra, oh that made me feel warm and fuzzy inside. I’m glad you enjoyed it.
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This was SO perfect!!
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Thank you so much. That’s the best thing I’ve heard all day!
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