First Crush – Friday Fictioneers – 04/05/13

It’s time for Friday Fictioneers. Thank you to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for leading this group.

Two very important trees in my life had to be chopped down. My story isn’t about this, as I decided to go in a different direction. While I did spend many a summer afternoon up in a tree, this is purely fiction.

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Genre: Literary Fiction (101 words)

From Scott Vanatter with permission-Copyright- Indira

First Crush

Under a lush canopy of green, we nest in our separate corners wiling away sticky, hot afternoons.  We share a mango ice from an orange peel. Our lips touch in impulse. To your surprise, I accept a dare and reveal small, handfuls of flesh. You smile and nod.

We drift when I have a boyfriend, but you rescue me as my homecoming date.

On a street corner in the city, you promise good news.

“Who’s the lucky girl?”

“His name is Joe,” you say, your eyes searching mine.

“Of course,” my eyes moist.

“Don’t worry, Charlotte. You’ll always be my girl.”

75 thoughts on “First Crush – Friday Fictioneers – 04/05/13

  1. Dear Amy,
    My best friend in HS was a guy. We spent a lot of time together talking and sharing dreams. It surprised a few when he was the best man and not the groom at my wedding.
    Nicely told story of friendship.
    PS We’re still friends.


    1. Dear Rochelle,
      Oh, thanks for sharing your story with me. I wish I had a guy friend like that! That’s great you’re still friends. Some friendships are meant to last! Thank you.


  2. Brilliant! It was amazing how you fitted that in, I felt like I had read a much longer story, my mind filling in the gaps through your subtle hints. A fine example of how to do this genre. 🙂


      1. I haven’t done it for a while. Reading and commenting on everyone’s post began to take so long, I was overwhelmed.
        I hope to start again as soon as my life relaxes a bit.


  3. A lovely story, done with details that reach beyond the story… of the kiss by impulse, that her first crush turns out to be gay, and her moist eyes. Very well written to wrap these details in a sweet story.


  4. There’s something so nostalgic about this piece, B.F… it’s wonderful!
    Hahaha… and while I know this is fiction it’s probably best I don’t remember too much about my crushes growing-up! Something tells me it would all be pretty embarrassing… like falling OUT of a tree in an attempt to ‘impress’ someone! Hahaha… wait a minute… this might explain a few things!


    1. Hahahah….I would love to hear some growing up stories from you! Maybe falling out of a tree was a good thing for you, huh? I’m sure there’s someone out there who has a fond memory or two of this. I’m glad you enjoyed it!


  5. you carried us all down our own personal memory lane with so few vivid words Amy–a well crafted , sweet ride


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