It’s time for Friday Fictioneers. As always, thanks to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for leading this group.
I went for a sea story today. Don’t mess with the wasp. Personally, I think they’re evil and have nothing but malicious intent.
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Copyright-Janet Webb
The Legend of Hornet Cave (105 words)
“Wasps stung him, his body never found. A half-man, half-wasp creature flies over these parts. The other guy escaped, but died a mysterious death.”
“How?” asked Suzanne, shivering in the canoe.
“He fell from a chair while attempting to kill a wasp,” said Doug.
“Oh, please.”
They pushed the canoe into the sand. At the cave’s entrance, they beheld a nest the size of five human heads. Wasps trickled out. Suzanne pocketed a delicate piece of a wasp nest found in the sand.
Rowing back to shore, wasps dive-bombed their intruders. With one piercing sting, Suzanne screamed and released the nest back into the water.
“He fell from a chair while attempting to kill a wasp” hahaha! What a way to go. Well better than being stung to death. A great story! 😀
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Thank you, Linda! Must been a really bad fall, huh? So, goes the Legend.
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that had to have been one hell of a chair! ha! It was kind of eerie to me the wasp coming after them. I hate wasps, bees, hornets. ugh.
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It must have been stories high. I guess he could have been stung to death too? I don’t mind the bees, since they do good things. Wasps, on the other hand….
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I try not to kill any of them as they all serve a purpose, but I’m allergic so I do try to stay away if possible. 🙂
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Oohh, my husband is allergic. I understand. Stay away from those bees!!
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It’s not the fall that kills you, just the sudden stop at the bottom. So they say… I see you changed it to ladder, but I liked the chair and its mystery!
Apparently the wasps were none too happy having a section of their home stolen. I don’t think I would be either if someone stole my bedroom!
Enjoyed it Amy, especially the canoe imagery. Nice!
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Thanks, Christy! Thanks for your feedback. Maybe I’ll change it back. After all, I want it to be a little out there, so Suzanne is skeptical. It’s good for a laugh anyway, right? I’m glad you liked it.
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Your call Amy, I found myself drawn to the chair because it was different and unlikely, so, yes, it aids her skepticism I think.
Comic relief can be good whenever tense, scary, and evil forces are at play (and wasps are all of those in my book!)
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Thanks, Christy! I changed it back…I’m going with my first instincts…
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I love it, suspense, and imagery all in words.
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Thank you so much, Lily. I appreciate your kind words.
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Rather a spooky place with an eerie history. Enjoyed it.
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Creepy one, Amy! Liked it!
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I like the story, Amy, and would NOT want to see a nest the size of five human heads!!
I find this last line, ” With one piercing blow, Suzanne screamed and released the nest back into the water”, a little confusing, though. Who or what gave the blow? Did the wasp sting her, which is what I think happened? In that case, it seems it would make more sense if it said something like, “After one piercing sting…” “Piercing blow” doesn’t seem to go together. A piercing scream, yes. A stinging (or other sort of) blow, yes. But what was the blow piercing?
janet
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Thanks for your feedback, Janet. Much appreciated. Yes, it is the wasp that is doing the stinging!
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Note to self, leave wasp nests alone this year! Ugh. Nicely done.
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Yes, I wouldn’t touch those nests, if I were you. Thank you!
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I love hearing a new legend! The image of their canoe at a cave’s interest is a great setup.
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Thanks. Thanks for your nice comments. I agree that a cave can have a lot of mystery.
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Very creepy. It doesn’t make me feel any better towards wasps. 🙂
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Thanks, Sandra! Thanks for reading. I absolutely loved yours this week!
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Legends are very powerful. They tend to grow and become even more intense with age. I’m glad she left the nest pieces behind.
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Legends can grow into something bigger and more scary, and then you must if you believe. I think she made a good choice to dump the nest, otherwise….Thanks for reading, Michelle.
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Goes to prove, never take what doesn’t belong to you or you will get stung
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I couldn’t have said that better, Randy. Thank you.
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Half-man, half-wasp – that doesn’t sound like someone you’d like to meet down a dark alley! Great story!
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Sounds like something out of comic book, does it not?! Indeed, it sounds dreadful. Thanks, El!
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Dear Amy,
The image of the wasps trickling from the nest the size of five human heads has me running for cover. I detest the little beasts. Good visuals. Stinging story.
shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle,
Thank you. I’m glad you enjoyed it. Watch out for those wasp nests!
Shalom,
Amy
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I love caves when I was a kid, there is something mysterious about them. This story really scratched my itch and I wanted more 🙂
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Thanks, Lyn. I think caves hold a lot of mystery, too. They are always a little spooky. Thanks for reading!
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Personally I don’t think that wasps are evil at all… And I enjoy to dress in yellow and black. Hmmmm maybe I’m a half wasp 😉
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Bjorn, wasps always seem mean to me. It’s probably because I’m afraid of them. Ha ha, you must be half wasp!
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haha one heck of a legend you’ve spun. funny AND creepy. well done 🙂
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Thank you, kz! Thanks for reading. Beware of the wasp!
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Great story! Very enjoyable. I love how you finished the story so we were not left hanging.
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Thanks, Monica. I tried to pull together in the end. It’s always a challenge, isn’t it? Thanks for reading mine.
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That legend opens ideas….I wonder if that piercing sting is the last thing that will happen to her. Wasps are the best thing to have in fields. Much better than pesticide!
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Hi Managua. I see you’ve changed your name a bit. Do you mean to say that wasps actually do some good?! Perhaps I shouldn’t be so hard on them!
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Wasps give me the heebee geebees!!!! …. so I could have been that guy.
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You are not alone, Frank. Wasps are not my friends. I see them, and I get out of their way. Unlike the nice honey bee…
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Those sound like the kind of urban legends teenagers tell each other. Of course, then to see something like that…it’d make me a believer. 🙂
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Probably a lot of legends begin with teenagers. I bet you’re right about that one. Of course, they always have to be far out there, so there’s skeptics. Thanks.
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I’ll make sure I’m never sitting on a chair when there’s a wasp around! 😉
I liked this story, Amy, there is a lot of description and the words “they beheld a nest the size of five human heads” reminds me of a green ants nest I saw yesterday. I’m going to have to get a picture of it 😀
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Oh no, Dianne! If anyone might see a nest of five human heads, it’s you!! Do take a picture and put in on your blog! I still can’t get over that iddy biddy lizard! Thanks.
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You had me on the edge of my canoe, Amy!
I think I would have been tempted to dive into the water at that point – and I don’t even swim!
🙂
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Hahaha! Me too…I would have never gone there! No one is ever going to drag me to a wasp nest. Never! Thanks.
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agreed — not much good to say about wasps, I guess they got their own back! A nest that large would be horrific.
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If I saw a nest that big, I would run or swim away! I think a lot of people automatically doubt of legend. This one obviously is true!
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YOU BEST RESPECT THE WASP. THEY ARE WATCHING!
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Definitely, Joe! Thanks for reading.
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Love the mixture of humor and scarey.
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Thanks, Ly. You know I hadn’t really thought of it that way!
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That’ll teach her.
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I guess so. She learned the painful way.
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