The Legend of Hornet Cave – Friday Fictioneers – 04/19/13

It’s time for Friday Fictioneers. As always, thanks to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for leading this group.

I went for a sea story today. Don’t mess with the wasp. Personally, I think they’re evil and have nothing but malicious intent.

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Copyright-Janet Webb

The Legend of Hornet Cave (105 words)

“Wasps stung him, his body never found. A half-man, half-wasp creature flies over these parts. The other guy escaped, but died a mysterious death.”

“How?” asked Suzanne, shivering in the canoe.

“He fell from a chair while attempting to kill a wasp,” said Doug.

“Oh, please.”

They pushed the canoe into the sand. At the cave’s entrance, they beheld a nest the size of five human heads. Wasps trickled out. Suzanne pocketed a delicate piece of a wasp nest found in the sand.

Rowing back to shore, wasps dive-bombed their intruders. With one piercing sting, Suzanne screamed and released the nest back into the water.

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57 thoughts on “The Legend of Hornet Cave – Friday Fictioneers – 04/19/13

  1. that had to have been one hell of a chair! ha! It was kind of eerie to me the wasp coming after them. I hate wasps, bees, hornets. ugh.

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      1. I try not to kill any of them as they all serve a purpose, but I’m allergic so I do try to stay away if possible. ๐Ÿ™‚

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  2. It’s not the fall that kills you, just the sudden stop at the bottom. So they say… I see you changed it to ladder, but I liked the chair and its mystery!

    Apparently the wasps were none too happy having a section of their home stolen. I don’t think I would be either if someone stole my bedroom!

    Enjoyed it Amy, especially the canoe imagery. Nice!

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    1. Thanks, Christy! Thanks for your feedback. Maybe I’ll change it back. After all, I want it to be a little out there, so Suzanne is skeptical. It’s good for a laugh anyway, right? I’m glad you liked it.

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      1. Your call Amy, I found myself drawn to the chair because it was different and unlikely, so, yes, it aids her skepticism I think.
        Comic relief can be good whenever tense, scary, and evil forces are at play (and wasps are all of those in my book!)

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  3. I like the story, Amy, and would NOT want to see a nest the size of five human heads!!

    I find this last line, ” With one piercing blow, Suzanne screamed and released the nest back into the water”, a little confusing, though. Who or what gave the blow? Did the wasp sting her, which is what I think happened? In that case, it seems it would make more sense if it said something like, “After one piercing sting…” “Piercing blow” doesn’t seem to go together. A piercing scream, yes. A stinging (or other sort of) blow, yes. But what was the blow piercing?

    janet

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  4. Dear Amy,
    The image of the wasps trickling from the nest the size of five human heads has me running for cover. I detest the little beasts. Good visuals. Stinging story.
    shalom,
    Rochelle

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  5. I’ll make sure I’m never sitting on a chair when there’s a wasp around! ๐Ÿ˜‰

    I liked this story, Amy, there is a lot of description and the words “they beheld a nest the size of five human heads” reminds me of a green ants nest I saw yesterday. I’m going to have to get a picture of it ๐Ÿ˜€

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