Fishing for Compliments – Friday Fictioneers – 11/01/13

It’s time for Friday Fictioneers. I hope it’s not too late for a spooky story.

A big thanks to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields and to Douglas MacIlroy for the photo. I’ve always loved koi ponds.

Genre: Mystery (100 words)

Copyright – Douglas M. MacIlroy

Fishing for Compliments

“Beautiful, aren’t they?” Nick said stiffly.

Teresa submerged her hand in the water. The koi approached in her direction.

“I better feed them now,” Nick said.

His hands trembled as he tossed food into the pond. All but Uncle Albert, a deep orange with leopard spots, darted for food. He circled Teresa’s hand gliding in the water and nipped her.

“Ouch,” Teresa blurted.

“I don’t think he’s ever done that,” Nick mumbled. “I’m sorry. You must leave now.”

“Whatever,” she rolled her eyes.

Driving in her car, Teresa swerved into a telephone pole, her eyes rolling up into her head.

66 thoughts on “Fishing for Compliments – Friday Fictioneers – 11/01/13

  1. Poison koi or could it be something even MORE sinister …? Ther’s something so … I don’t know … “Charles Addams” about this. I like it! Thanks, Amy.


    1. Right, I can see this at the Addams Family house. Totally. Couldn’t you see them with teeth, nipping at everybody, jumping out of the water? In my story, the koi have evil living spirits residing in them, or at least in one of them, Uncle Albert. Thank you!


    1. Poor Teresa. I think the last eye roll was her doom! Thanks! Oh, not a problem, Dawn. You are not late. I was so busy with the Halloween holiday, I couldn’t get to my blog. I’m behind in my reading too! I’ll be over at your story today. 🙂


  2. Dear Amy,

    Insert quotation marks after Nick stops speaking in that one sentence. Sinister and well paced. Lots of evil koi in this world, I’m finding out.




    1. Perry, the koi embodies an evil spirit that is Uncle Albert. I know usually koi represent light and hope, except in my story! He’s looking out for his nephew and no one, apparently, is good enough for him.


  3. Not exactly Uncle Arthur from Bewitched is he? I wonder if he has a hideous laugh? Good thing she didn’t stick her toe in the water. That would have really offended him.


  4. I’ve been bitten by catfish, pike and blues, but I’ve never, ever been so taken by a carp. This is a wicked tale that leaves me wondering: “What is it so deadly in the mouth of a koi?”


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