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100 words
Timekeeper
Mist hung like moss in his eyes. Nick sloshed through the mud and sank deeper with each step.
A dark shadow emerged at the fence line, his body an outline of a cardboard cutout. He smoked a cigarette and looked at his watch.
“A little help please,” said Nick, his throat caked with dirt.
“You just couldn’t stay buried,” the man said. “There always Plan B.” He watched Nick descend into murkiness.
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Nick awoke with sun in his eyes, his clothes and skin clean. The man grabbed his hand through the fence. “You were a tough one to kill.”
Good one Amy, like so many stories this week there is a lovely sinister overtone. Like it…
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Thanks, Michael. Yes, I bet they are sinister this week. This prompt is like an invitation!
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Oh oh, he was a tough one to kill wasn’t he? Good creepy story Amy!
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Thanks, Jackie!
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You do have a love for that neitherworld King thing, dontcha? I am amazed how much you get going with a 100 words.
Love Ya’,
Shalagh
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Hey, Shalagh. Sometimes my mind goes to a dark place. Thank you. Love you, too. Amy
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Gruesome writing. Well done.
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Thank you.
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That was awesome. Amazing what you can with just a few words. I love the creepiness.
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Thanks, Trent! That means a lot coming from you. I’m pleased you liked it. Now you…you should try it.
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I’m working up the courage (insert funny emoticon).
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Oh, you can do it. I know this.
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Lordy, Amy… how oh how do you go there? Amazing how dark this story is, and yet there’s a realism to it that breaks through the dark. Nice job!
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Ha ha! I don’t know…darkness seeps into my brain for moments at a time. That’s a very nice comment. Thank you, Dawn!
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Gulp!
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Ha ha!
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This is really sinister, and very well executed. (Sank, not sunk I think). That image of the cardboard cut out was really effective.
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Thanks, Sandra! I appreciate that. Will fix that, too.
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Fantastic. Only 100 words and you crafted an image and story in my head that makes me want to keep reading. Such a tease … Evil.
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Ah, thank you very much, Audra. Oh, I hope you’ll forgive me!
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I look forward to your weekly installment of FF very much
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Audra, that means so much to me! Thank you sooo much!!
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Excellent!
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Thank you, miss!
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Love your story! I gave it a shot too… *holds breath* now we shall see….. 🙂
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Thanks. Oh, great!! Good for you. I will stop by, Courtney. – Amy
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Oh there is a mystery here that needs exploring! Some oddness seeps through the land and the man…spooky stuff..
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I think it does need some exploration. Ooh, it is strange stuff, even to me! Thanks, Merlin.
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Nice twist Amy.
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Thanks, Dawn.
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Goosebumps! You gave me goosebumps…again.
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Ooooh, Michelle. I’m at your service for goosebumps! Thanks. That made me smile.
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That’s ghoulish and creepy, Honeybee. But in a good way.
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I’m glad you think so, Weebs! I wouldn’t want to scare you or anything.
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Great story, Amy. Very creepy indeed! 😀
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Thanks, Dianne!
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All the adjectives are taken up – what a Grand Story – so CREEPY it made me SMILE 😉 Thanks, Nan
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Thank you, Nan. I’m glad it creeped and made you smile! That’s quite a compliment. – Amy
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Great story and great tension 🙂
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Thanks, Helen. I’m glad you liked it.
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Scary stuff – leaves a lot of mystery!
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Thanks, Erin. It was a wonderful prompt.
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See that? You CAN do it in 100 words. Ernie Hemingway and Raymond Carver were right. So is The Bumble Files.
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Oh wow, thank you!! That’s quite a heap of praise. I’m blushing over here. Thanks for reading.
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I guess being tough to kill is a good thing. After two or three tries they just give up. Great story, Amy.
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Thanks, Russell. I’m glad you liked it.
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This could go in many directions… I really felt sorry for Nick… in those few words too… although I had a good feeling at the end.
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Thanks, Ted. Yes, I seem to write a lot of stories that could go in many directions. I guess that’s the way I like it. Thanks for reading!
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Wow. Very well done, captured the mood of the photo prmpt so well!
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Thanks, Jan!
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So the killer and the victim meet again… hmmm wonder if they’ll be friends now,
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Bjorn, I have a feeling that they will, but their relationship may be a tad strained.
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I’d have gone with zombies.
Yours was much better.
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Zombies, you can’t wrong with them! I love zombies. This would make a good zombie scene. Thanks, Guapo.
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Wow, great story, Amy! So is that death? I could see him smoking cigarettes. I love all the metaphors here.
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Thanks, David. I didn’t really write it that way, but now that you mention it, it definitely could be death. I need to get to your blog! I see I have some catching up. Hope you’re well.
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excellent take on the photo! this should be expanded 🙂
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Thank you, kz. I think this could go somewhere.
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I like it when the story goes dark like this…
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Oh, me too. I’m glad you approve, Aussa.
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Dear Amy.
I really would love to know the back story to this one. Nick just doesn’t want to die, does he? I agree with KZ. This should be expanded.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle,
Thank you! I don’t have any back story today, but I most certainly could supply one. Maybe I will expand it. That’s the great thing about FF. I get so many ideas here.
Shalom,
Amy
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Really gritty, good writing. You had him described wonderfully by his killer – I just got all his character from the one sentence and who was after him. That was brilliant.How’s the novel by the way?
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Managua, I’m grinning from ear to ear reading your comment. Thank you so! The novel, slow…I need to return to it is what I really need to say. Thanks for asking.
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When I see these, the first thing I do is look at the image to gain a mood … and this time we matched. 🙂
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Oh, nice to hear! Thanks, Frank.
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Love this! The image matches perfectly. My kind of writing. Very spooky. 🙂
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Thanks, Nicole! I’m glad you enjoyed it!
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Creepy, frightening, horrific. Sounds like my life. Nice job, Amy!
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Oh my, I hope not Perry! I’m going to have to start writing happy things now, just for you. Thanks.
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