Manual for Bureaucracy
1. File in, collect a number, determine destination.
2. Sit down, complete paperwork, wait to be called.
3. Talk to the hole in the glass, return paperwork.
4. Wait.
5. Talk to the glass; learn you need a Specialist.
6. Repeat Step 2, add paperwork.
7. Walk through long, white corridor. Hint: Turn left, left, right, no left. Just follow the red tape.
8. Repeat Steps 1 and 4.
9. Talk to the Assistant who talks to the Specialist.
10 Repeat Step 2.
11. Learn it is the wrong Specialist.
12. Repeat 2, 4, and 9.
13. Take multiple flights of stairs. Hint: Follow the red tape if you’re lost.
14. Read the sign: Sorry. We’re closed. Come back tomorrow.
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Thanks to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for her dedication and leadership to this group. If you would like to give it a try, visit her Addicted to Purple blog for instructions. Thanks to Sandra Crook for the photo today. I like this one a lot.
I tried a little something new today. I’m not sure it qualifies as a story. Tell me how you feel at the end of this. Thanks for reading.
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Genre: Humor (99 words)
It reads like an M. C. Escher lithograph.
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Oh joy! I like that. Are you feeling a little dizzy? Thanks!
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LOL reminds me of many a trek to a specialist for something, you got it pegged right Amy Good one!
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You and me both. Thanks, Jackie!
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Amy,
I love it. The format really gives the right feeling. And it’s outside of the box on a subject that is inside a box. Ya know? Keep doing what you do. I read your 4 part series and I love your kinda weird.
Love,
Shalagh
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Ah, I love your comments. Thanks, Shalagh, I appreciate that. Thanks for reading my story. I’ll take weird any day! 🙂
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Amy, this is great and as someone who likes to experiment with form in the FF, I think it’s brilliant. I just wish it was fiction. 🙂 I think we’ve all had experiences like this, in fluorescent-lit concrete-block halls in hospitals and government institutions. You have used the photo well.
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Thanks, David! I could make it more fictional I suppose 🙂 Hmm, I would have to think about it! I hope I’m not disqualified this week. 🙂
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No, don’t get me wrong, that wasn’t a criticism! I was just joking that I totally understood the situation. It was perfect.
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Oh, okay! Right! It’s too true. 😉
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BINGO! Awesome story, Amy! Garrison Keillor couldn’t have done better! I like it as is.
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Thanks, Kent! I’m glad you liked it. Thanks for the kind words.
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LOVE IT!
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Thanks so much, Jim! I’m glad you enjoyed it. 🙂
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Dear Amy, I think this is awesome and perfect! I think I have been there many, many times and at the end, usually something happens, as in your submission, “they are closed, come back tomorrow!” Hilarious! And, I usually do follow the red tape! GREAT! Nan 🙂
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Nan, thank you so much for your kind words! I appreciate it! Your comments made me smile. I know, I follow it too. There seems to be no choice in the matter. 🙂
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You’ve hit it on the head. Well done.
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Thanks, Patrick!
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This is awesome! I loved it! 🙂
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Thanks, Courtney! I appreciate that. 🙂
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Geez that made me frustrated just reading it! lol
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Dawn, I can relate. It was hard to write, too. lol 🙂
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Lol
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So good and unfortunately often so true. Well done on trying something different and succeeding!
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Thanks, Sarah! I wish it wasn’t true. FF is a good place to stretch out and experiment. Thanks for the nice words. 🙂
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Love this. I used to get these collections of short short fiction (2-3) pages when I was in high school and college. And they made me want to write, like really write. This piece reminded me of those surprising works.
Although I don’t get the direct connection with the photo. But do I need to? And it could always be the “Lego cake” I was decorating at 3 am this morning. It’s thrown off my ability to understand even the most normal and obvsious things…
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Thanks, Jen. That’s such a nice compliment you paid me. I appreciate that very much. I’m going with the herd mentality, i.e. following orders even if they make no sense!
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Seems like a story to me. A story which anyone can relate. School, military service, corporate employment, getting a driver’s license, air travel, doctor visit. Take your pick, you described all of these activities in your story. Well done.
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Exactly. My story could apply to all of those things you mentioned. Well said! Thanks for the nice words, Honie!
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I think I stopped at #6 because I can’t continue from laughing hard! This is a treasure. Well-done! 🙂
– Matthew
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Thank you, Matthew! Your comments are a treasure to me. 🙂 Thanks for stopping by.
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Yep, sounds pretty close to the mark when desperately needing to see someone . Anyone in any branch of council, government, healthcare etc 🙂
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Doesn’t it seem to happen this way when you feel you’re most desperate? I couldn’t agree more. Thanks, Alistair. 🙂
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Dear Amy,
Sounds just like what was written on the sign above the gate to Hades in Dante’s Inferno.
I like how you stretched your wings. The story works fine.
Aloha,
Doug
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Dear Doug,
This sign would belong above the gate to Hades. I’ll have to reference Dante’s Inferno. It’s been awhile since I’ve read that one.
Thanks so much!
Aloha,
Amy
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In addition to dealing with the government, this reminds me of some doctor visits I’ve experienced. The format was a perfect way to present the information. I say go with what works, and this definitely was the right choice. Well done.
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That’s funny. After you left you comment, I got another comment from a blogger who had just that…an experience a doctor’s office. And it follows my instructions almost perfectly! It’s both funny and haunting. Thanks so much, Russell.
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Awesome! Very innovative form, works perfectly. Loved it!
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Thank you, Jan! I’m glad you enjoyed it.
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Amy – stellar how you numbered the steps then repeated them. A true feeling of frustration and bemusement arose as I read this. Thank you.
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Thanks. I thought I might give that a try. I’m glad it had the intended effect…oh, and sorry about that. 🙂
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This is brilliant, Amy! It reminds me of taking my parents-in-law to an appointment at oncologist last week. It was a nightmare, my mother-in-law is in the early stages of dementia and father-in-law has bowel cancer. We arrived at the hospital and had to follow the red lines to the oncology ward where we found a sign ‘take a ticket’. Mother-in-law pressed the thing she thought was for the ticket and it was the hand-sanitizer. It took me about 10 minutes to find out what we actually had to do (which wasn’t take a ticket – that was an old sign they forgot to take down). We needed to scan all the papers at the front desk (and that didn’t work). I finally got to talk to someone and we were told to sit and wait. Two hours later the doctor comes out and gets father-in-law. Ten minutes later father-in-law comes out and says there was a mix up with the appointments and we were to come back in a week. ARGH! Lucky I’m a patient person (and I was with them!) 😉
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Oh wow!! Dianne, first let me say how sorry I am that you endured this at the doctor’s office. How positively awful. Your experience fits my instructions quite nicely (with slight variations). He was even told to go home and come back! Ha ha. I couldn’t help but laugh as I read your account. OMG!! Are you okay? You are patient and they are quite lucky you were there. People must feel worse off after a visit there. I hope they can get it right next time. Thanks! 🙂
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I’m okay 😉 I’ve been their chauffeur for a couple of months now, mainly it’s okay but it can be a bit stressful at times (like yesterday there was another docs appointment in the city and they weren’t sure where it was, but my mother-in-law kept saying ‘it’s near a big tree’ – LOL, I eventually found the place and there was no big tree) 😀
I’d love to write about these things on my blog but I’m worried family might see it and not get the humour of the situation 😀
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That’s funny about the tree! Oh, I would love to hear it all. I am my dad’s chauffeur right now. He seems pretty disoriented when he can’t drive, and is never sure where anything is. I understand how you might not put it all in a blog post. I struggle with that sometimes. Like it would fun to lay it all there, but others might not be so amused. Hang in there! Thanks for sharing with me. 🙂
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😀
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Definitely qualifies as a story in my book – and a brilliant one. Great concept, brilliantly executed 🙂
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Thanks so much, El. I appreciate it. 🙂
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Dear Amy,
I’m late to comment and it seems all my words have been stolen. 😉 Your experiment is a definite success. In my book it counts as a story, one that most of us could’ve written from experience at one time or another. Bravo!
shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you, Rochelle. Unfortunately, many of us could write this. Sad, but true. Ha ha. Shalom, Amy
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🙂 This reminded me of applying for a temporary residency visa whilst in Johannesburg. Except the greater part of the wait was conducted out in the blazing sun. You always come up with something different Amy, well done.!
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Oh Sandra, that sounds terrible. I hope you didn’t get sunburned. I think many can relate to this one, unfortunately. Thanks so much!
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Ah.. sounds like too real to be true.. getting caught in that… but I guess today it’s all built on voice-mail—
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Oh voicemail, don’t get me started, Bjorn. I could write a separate piece on that one. That one really tests my patience. Thanks for your comments. 🙂
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Oh so true …. Brilliant!
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Thank you kindly, Frank! I wish it wasn’t true, but I’m afraid it is.
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Clever! The format really helps set the mood for this story. Great job!
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Thank you, Miss Tiff. I appreciate it.
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You’re welcome!
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Bureaucracy often does make us feel like we are being herded like cattle. And there is always lots of red tape. Your manual is long over due.
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The red tape is there, no matter what. Ah, thanks Michelle.
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Amy, You got it right, red tape literally and figuratively. It took me almost three months to get an Indian visa here and my passport didn’t even have to leave the building. After several trips waiting and sitting, my husband went there and told the Chief of Police upstairs. She phoned downstairs to that department and my husband got the visa a few minutes later. No money changed hands then but you often have to bribe people here to get any results. It’s expected.
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Susan, I just had a visitor who mentioned India as being difficult. Your situation with your visa is a perfect red tape example. See now, these things don’t need to be so complicated and inefficient. I’m glad you finally got it! Thanks for your comments.
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I enjoyed your tongue-in-cheek, wry humor! Oh, and for red tapism, you should visit India!
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I’d live to visit India, but not for that reason. Ha ha! Thanks for the visit and your lovely comments.
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