Clean Slate – Friday Fictioneers

Clean Slate

Freya looked past the fence into the mist, her eyes piercing into darkness.

“It’s too thick, Freya. We’re too late,” Eli turned around.

“You must free your mind, Eli. Let it go,” Freya said, tilting her head. He heard the soft-spoken wisdom of their mother.

She gathered the fog in a circular motioning of her arms, creating a wind around them.

“Hold my hand. Now.” Freya pulled them in one motion through a rush of water. They collapsed on hard, cracked dirt, their feet tangled in barbed wire.

“No, Freya. I want to go back.”

“We can never go back.”

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Thanks to the wonderful leadership of Rochelle Wisoff-Fields and to all of the talented writers I have the pleasure of knowing through this amazing group. Thanks to Erin Leary for this week’s photo for the prompt.

I’m putting on my fantasy wings today and continuing my story of the brother and sister duo, Eli and Freya. I will write of story about them someday. I can feel it. I hope you will indulge me in my experimenting here.

If you are interested in participating, all are welcome. It has been a tremendous help for my writing. Why not give it a try? Click here for instructions.

For more stories from the Fictioneers, click here.

Genre: Fantasy/YA (100 words)

Copyright – Erin Leary

 

 

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70 thoughts on “Clean Slate – Friday Fictioneers

  1. i guess we can’t know what they are too late for and why they are too late. or why they can’t go back. or where they are, or who their mother is. or what she said that he was listening to. or… πŸ˜‰

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  2. I thoroughly enjoy the way you’re weaving so many of your Friday Fictioneer tales into one overarching story Amy. Every time one pops up, I feel like I’m delving back into a world which I only ever catch glimpses of, but which is familiar nonetheless. Magical, in every sense.

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    1. Thanks so much, Dianne. I appreciate your feedback, as well. I’m excited you got a visual! I have one, too. I’m not sure how since I haven’t described them yet even for myself. πŸ˜€

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  3. Hey Amy!
    I liked it! There’s just something about the countryside which brings out all sorts of reflection and action.
    Regards
    Jim

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  4. such a great hook! now i want to know what happens next… i love the descriptions because you did it so well that it was easy for the readers to envision the scene their heads.(and that’s important in fantasy stories with plenty of action) great job πŸ™‚

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    1. I just thought it would be horribly sad (and dramatic) if they ended up in a worse place. The countryside was so pretty. Oh, too bad for them! Thanks so much, Perry.

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  5. Very well done. I liked it. and I’m vaguely remembering the brother and sister walking maybe. Yes, I think they are due a adventurous journey with your guidance. I miss hearing from you. And at the same time, I’m so proud of you.
    Love,
    Shalagh

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    1. Thank you, Shalagh! I’ve missed you too . I read your last post but couldn’t comment. My computer had been hacked and can’t even use it. Then I have my child taking my phone (my last resort!). Anyway, I’m technologically challenged at the moment. Thanks for stopping by. Love ya, Amy

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  6. “I want to go back.” I get that longing.
    I do so enjoy what you do with the adventures and connection of Eli and Freya.

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  7. Dear Amy,

    Experiment away! You told everyone this was an exercise and that is all you need to offer in the way of disclaimers. I still want to know what that ‘w’ and ‘y’ word was. Spreading your wings and leaving the nest often entails raising a lot of dust and feathers. Some people are allergic to both, but the only way to fly is to try.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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    1. Dear Doug,

      Thank you. I write for an audience, but writing is a journey for me, too. Thanks for the uplifting comments. I needed to hear it. You can’t fly unless you try. So true.

      Aloha,
      Amy

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