Enter at Your Own Risk – Friday Fictioneers

His sister’s house drapes over velvet sand felt between your toes, a hammock for a rest to feel the air flow light and breezy.

His brother owns a palatial tower, but you must make appointments for a view, and you’re lucky if he can squeeze you in.

Harvey’s place teeters on collapse, built into the crevice of a mountain. Enter at your own risk. His genius compartmentalizes treatments, payments, disappointment and regret in haphazard corners. He treats his guests to dinner on cracked dishes on a table with candles. A partial roof over their heads offers refuge from the rain.

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Genre: Who Knows (100 words)

Copyright: Björn Rudberg 

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I went for abstract today. I’m suggesting a “mental house” is someone’s mind. How would it be for someone to visit your mental house? I apologize if this doesn’t qualify as a story.

This is a great photo for our prompt, courtesy of Bjorn Rudberg. Thanks to the talented Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for leading the Friday Fictioneers. She is incredibly dedicated, and I am so grateful.

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79 thoughts on “Enter at Your Own Risk – Friday Fictioneers

  1. What a fascinating and intriguing character, Amy. Much more interesting than his siblings. I’m dying to know about the “treatments” he offers. I love the way the houses reflect the characters.

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    1. Thanks, Bjorn. I just had to experiment with this idea. I think you’re right. Those who offer the most risk are often the most worthwhile friends, maybe because you share so much and there is more give and take.

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    1. Michelle, I think Harvey’s is risky, no doubt about that. But, like you said, he’s just more honest. At least you’ll know when you are in trouble. This may not be true for the others. Great observation.

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    1. Great, Alistair. I’m glad you went that direction and extended it to their personality. That could be another layer. Their mental house may or may not reflect their personality. Oh, the human condition. Thanks!

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  2. Those actually are fascinating characters, considering their mentality. It has the beginnings of a really pretty good-sounding story. I’d suggest you develop it. Seems like it has potential. Nice work, Amy!

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      1. We’ve been out paddleboarding a few times, going out again tomorrow.
        I think I’m getting better – most of my falls are intentional these days.

        Haven’t been surfing yet. I’ll probably head back out in the fall, after the guy we’re paddling with closes down.

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      2. How fun! There’s one place out here that gives lessons. I think I would definitely sign up for those first before going on the lake. It seems easy, but then there’s lessons, so it must be tricky.

        Falling on purpose is fun, Guapo! The best kind of falling.

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    1. Thanks, Jen. You’re so sweet. I think my head would hurt if I thought about my family in this way. Oh no! Now, I may have to try it. It would be complex, because I have five siblings.

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    1. I’m not sure what my mental house would look like, Dawn, but like yours, I think it would shift a lot, or maybe it collapses and must be rebuilt all the time! I think I’m too close to see my own. Thank you so much!

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  3. Amy, I think the different types make for an interesting world. It would be pretty boring if we were all the same. Very interesting and well-written story. I think I like Harvey best also as a friend, but it would be kind of rough being married to him. Interesting and well-written story. 🙂 —Susan

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    1. Very true, Susan. How boring it would be if all of our houses looked and felt the same. What would be the fun in visiting anyone else’s house? Harvey seems like a complex guy and probably not easy to have a relationship with. Thanks so much! 🙂

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  4. Amy,
    I like the Who Knows genre. Some great work in that one. 🙂 I like this and how well you conveyed the three personalities through architecture. I’m not sure which one I am, but probably closer to the last one. How about you?

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    1. Greetings, David! So good to see you. Thanks. I think the Who Knows genre is my favorite. 🙂 I think I could extend this one a bit. I’m definitely closest to the last one! I never tire of complexity.

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  5. I loved the images in this as soon as I read the first version, but this edit is better – that opening line is even more beautiful. I wonder if the compartmentalising helps Harvey keep it together. It can’t be easy having his siblings. Love the genre – think we’ll be seeing a lot more of that. 🙂

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    1. Oh, I’m not sure what you read first. I actually didn’t edit it. Hmm. Thanks so much for the kind words, Sarah. I have a feeling compartmentalizing is what Harvey does best to cope. Could be….who knows?! 🙂

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      1. Hmm, curious. The version that came into my email inbox was different.
        I’m with Harvey on the compartmentalising – have too many email accounts, but if I only had one I’d never find anything (or get anything done).

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      2. Oh, come to think of it, I did edit it in the beginning! I sometimes do that with my FF right when I post it. Well, I’m glad you think I improved it! Thanks.

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