Samantha whistled at her feet. Boring.
Samantha’s warm visage emboldened her to take broad steps across the street like nobody’s business. Whatever does that mean?
Why Samantha? Sabrina? Sarina? Must it start with a “s”? How about Carina?
Carina traveled, strode…no, glided effortlessly…wandered?…no…sauntered…
Oh, look. A bill I need to pay. Hey, there’s my lotion. (Lathers copious amounts on body).
Carina careened into a car… no, a bus!…her broad steps diverted, her short journey across the street made shorter, curtailed…flattened, her warm visage decidedly blue.
Poor Carina. Already dead. My character didn’t even make it across the street.
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Genre: Humor (100 words)
Copyright: Jan Wayne Fields
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I’ve attempted to create a piece that is awkward and forced, in which the writer is feeling a bit of a block. I guess Carina was simply not meant to be.
Thanks to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for hosting Friday Fictioneers, and to Jan Wayne Fields for the photo. If you want to try this 100-word challenge, please join in!
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Poor Carina. She was definitely a very short story.
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Poor thing! She’s outta there. Moving on, I guess.
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Your blog is always such fun reading. Keep up the great work!
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Thanks, Roy! You’re sweet. Thanks for reading.
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“I’ve attempted to create a piece that is awkward and forced, in which the writer is feeling a bit of a block.”
You’ve succeeded! This was a really creative entry. 🙂
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Ah, thanks so much! I appreciate that, Zombie. 🙂 You don’t mind if I call you Zombie, do you? I can’t help myself.
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Amy – this is so deep blog. Wow!
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Thanks, Mihran. I’m glad you think so.
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maybe your character Samantha is the owner of my character’s blog. 🙂 love how you ran through all the different names of characters…it felt very real, the writer’s block thing.
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Thanks, Sun. It was a little tricky to do, you know, to force it. Actually, not really. I just had fun with it. I’ll send Samantha/Sabrina/Carina over to your blog now. She’s all done here! Thanks. 🙂
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The writer has the power, life or death, he/she decides! Poor Carina, Sabrina….could have a little more of this world.
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That’s so true, Elizabeth. That is the power, the writer decides who lives and who doesn’t. Ah, yes, the power. Poor Carina, she had to walk into a bus. What was she thinking anyway? 🙂
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Dear Amy,
That was a real tweet.
Randy
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Thanks, Randy!
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It is good to know that the piece was intentionally awkward and forced – and yet well told. 🙂
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I felt I needed to add the little note at the bottom, otherwise I’m not sure people would get it. I’m glad it worked. Thanks! 🙂
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Copious amounts of lotion. Uhhuhhuh..uhuhuh.
Pay no attention to me..
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Lotion can be such a distraction, you know. Ha ha. A good excuse to pause.
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I’m still stuck on this hand thing..
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Why don’t you just rub your hands in lotion? C’mon, try it.
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Now I can’t open the door!
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There you go! It’s working. 🙂 Now, open a jar of pickles.
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Alas poor Carina. I knew her in passing. (Great take on the prompt!!)
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Carina was not long for this world. Maybe she’ll find her way back. Thanks!
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Some days are like that. Where’s the lotion? Your piece replicates the almost scatter-gun approach my mind will take on some days. Good work.
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I try to push through those days and get past the hurdle. This prompt was a little like that, so hey, why not write about it? Thanks, Sandra.
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lol love where you decided to take this. genius. 🙂
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Thanks so much, KZ! 🙂
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Love this, Amy. It illustrates my thought processes as I write! Hehehe! Good one!
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Tom, I completely understand. I’m glad you liked it! Thanks.
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Dear Amy,
It took me a couple of lines to realize what was going on here. Then I laughed out loud. I’ve had this experience. Love the stream of consciousness, easily distracted inner dialogue. 😀
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Yeah, I was wondering how it would read. I’m glad it made sense to you and that I could make you laugh! My inner dialogue seems to be most active when I’m writing. Gee, I wonder why that is. Thanks, Rochelle. 😀
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I love the thought process, cleverly done 🙂
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Thanks so much, Helen. 🙂
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Carina is there and gone in a blink of an eye.
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I know. Too bad, Carina. She did give it a go and tried really hard. I’ll give her credit for that. 🙂
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Very clever and fun use of the prompt., Well done!
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Thank you, Grace!
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Sums up the frustration of writer’s block perfectly.
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Thanks, Carol. Funny, it’s harder to fake it and pretend at writer’s block, even though I am too familiar with it!
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This made me laugh! Sometimes characters just don’t make it….. Alicia
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Very clever take on the picture. And so true…names, verbs, character’s life span…so many tough choices when writing a story.
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Thanks, Melanie. My favorite part is, “Carina careened…” which I actually didn’t plan. I laugh at myself!
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A very original take on the prompt. Well thought out and light hearted
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Thanks!
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LOL She should have taken lessons from the chicken.
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Ha ha, Patti, right. The chicken would have some wisdom for her.
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I loved hearing this poor writer’s process! I can feel their frustration coming through, which I think was to blame for Carina’s untimely end 🙂
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You got that right, Alistair! Poor Carina. Maybe on another day, she’ll live on the page a wee bit longer. 🙂 Thanks so much for reading.
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Hahaha! Rochelle and I joke about the times we discuss people who aren’t there (characters from her books, of course).
Nice, Amy. I LOVE it!
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Characters can make a quite impression in our real lives and it’s sad when they die an unexpected death, especially if they were just born. Ha ha Thanks so much, Kent!
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Ha Ha! What a nice take on the prompt, wonder how many characters did not make it across that desk.
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Thank you! I guess some characters are just not meant to be. If they come crying back, I suppose we can let them in. Ha ha.
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Amy, That was hilarious. XD I sat here and laughed. Poor thing; she couldn’t even make it across the street. It finally took a bus to stop her though. That was really a short existence. 😀 Well written indeed. 🙂 —Susan
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Thanks, Susan. I glad it made you laugh. It just so happened a bus hit her, or um, she wandered into it! Oh well. Easy come, easy go. She didn’t quite make the cut! 🙂
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What do they say about editing “kill your darlings” – but it sounds the author didn’t care too much about carina.. so the killing has to be swifter…
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Sarina or Carina, whatever her name is, she didn’t make the cut, Bjorn. It was swift, that’s for sure. Poor darling.
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So many of our wonderful characters leave us too soon. Many still, however, keep a place in our minds and hearts. I shall keep “what’s her name” doing whatever wherever in mind until whenever.
Scott
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Scott, I’m so pleased that she’s made enough of an impression that you will keep her in mind, even if it is until whenever! I think it’s really hard when you love a character, and zap, the character is killed unexpectedly. It can make for exciting reading though, but sad nonetheless.
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It is one of the things that makes watching “The Walking Dead” difficult! They can and do kill off major players who I have taken the time to get to know well.
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I know, I know! I feel the same way about that show. I understand the writer of that comic book doesn’t hesitate whatsoever to kill his characters off. My husband who has read it has told me to not get too attached to anyone. Oh! Just don’t kill off Daryl! Please no.
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All of you women just love Daryl.
I enjoy the two sisters and Mishonng (sp?). I have this feeling about them, though.
Another show that’s rough for this is “Game of Thrones”! Don’t kill off my favorites, please!!!
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Yeah, you’re probably right. Why, I don’t know! Now I’m a little behind, haven’t seen season 4. But I know I like Michonne a lot. And Game of Thrones, I haven’t really watched except a couple of episodes. It’s on my list! That’s definitely another one that kills off favorites.
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Xfinity offered Game of Thrones free for 5 days, so, in that time, I watched all the episodes for the first 3 or 4 seasons. I have not seen the last 1/2 of the current season. I am growing restless; I need that fix!
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I’ll have to keep my eye out for special offers! Binge watching is fun, isn’t it?
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Yes, unfortunately for my attempts at work and sleep, it is…
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Dear Amy, You are so entertaining and write a great story – poor Carina – how’s the bus? Good story – very funny! Nan 🙂
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Thanks so much, Nan! I think the bus is still running. 🙂
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Carina careened and Amy animated, played, cavorted. I love you way you showed us a bit more of your writing process and humour with this. Isn’t it what we all do at times? Good one!
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Ah, thanks Sarah! I try to have fun with it. Sometimes something can come out of a really bad sentence. If not, death is always an option! Carina careened was totally unplanned, and my favorite part of this.
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Amy, I didn’t read through all the comments, but I appreciate your use of strong verbs (careened). It’s amusing to witness the brain’s conflicting signals during the writing process. Seemed like a tug-of-war going on inside . . .
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Thanks, Anka. Words are fun, aren’t they? It’s just a matter of picking the right one. They’re so many after all. Good to see you.
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Hope you had a restful Monday. I finally put my last baby to sleep. Now it’s my turn!
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