Dancing Orbs – Friday Fictioneers

Genre: Apocalyptic (103 words)

Dancing Orbs

The observatories lined the hillside like a strand of shining bulbs on a Christmas tree. Their orchestral mirrors probed the skies to deliver bewildering images beyond explanation. Certainly they must have answers about the icy dust covering the planet.

The two dotted figures slogged through the snow, dragging their icicle brick feet up the mountain. They plunged ahead, transfixed by the glow of dancing orbs.

They were greeted with smiles and then doors slammed behind them.

“Our volunteers have arrived,” a man whisked them down a hallway.

“Wait. No.”

“Congratulations. You’ve been selected to save the human race.”

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This prompt was for the Friday Fictioneers weekly challenge, where a group of writers across the globe write a 100-word story based on a photo.

I apologize for my lateness, but I will admit that this prompt really stumped me. I gave it a go anyway! I’m not that pleased with my story, but here it is.

All are welcome to participate. If you are interested, join in!

Thank you to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for hosting and to Doug MacIlroy for this amazing photo.

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57 thoughts on “Dancing Orbs – Friday Fictioneers

  1. I agree with Dale. Your story makes an enjoyable read and I love the description of the observatories “like bulbs on a Christmas tree”. Dancing orbs is also a very fitting title. “Icicle brick feet” … another good description. 🙂 I’m intrigued by that last line, too. I can’t help wondering what they’re supposed to save the human race from…

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  2. Amy, I’m glad you joined me and Doug in the triple digits this week. And here I thought I’d be dead last. 🙂 I like this story for its mixture of impending doom and hopefulness. I get the feeling that the “volunteers” didn’t know what they were getting into.

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  3. This photo clearly took several of us in this direction! Such a haunting image. Despite your challenge with it, I think you’ve done a really nice job capturing the story behind this photo prompt, Amy! Nice job!

    I thought that in the first line/sentence, it would be stronger if it read lights ON a Christmas tree. Just a thought; the story is very good regardless. 😉

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    1. Oh, thanks! My mind feels a bit strained lately, but I’m glad I tried something. Yes, I like that better, Dawn. Great suggestion. I’ll make the change when my child lets me have the computer back. 🙂

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  4. Oh no! This does not sound negotiable, does it? That’s some project ahead for them 😦

    I think you’ve written a great piece, Amy…It’s difficult to judge our own work sometimes.

    Ellespeth

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    1. Right, Ellespeth. You got that right. This is not negotiable. Thanks. I agree, sometimes it’s better to not think too much and be too critical. People are very encouraging. 🙂

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  5. Good story, Amy. Nothing wrong with it. I don’t think it looks good for these volunteers. though. That door slamming behind them sounds kind of final. Perhaps “test subjects” might be a better name for them. Well done. 🙂 — Suzanne

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