The Mist Arrives – Friday Fictioneers

It’s time for Friday Fictioneers, a weekly challenge where writers across the globe attempt to write a 100-word story based on a photo prompt. Thanks to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields and her generous leadership and to Santoshwriter for supplying this week’s photo.

All are welcome to participate. Join in! Here are instructions.

And now my story:

PHOTO PROMPT – © Santoshwriter

Genre: Fantasy (100 words)

The Mist Arrives

Citizens of Edgewater stopped in mid-sentence, their bakery orders left unfilled and their stories left untold, as they fled for cover. Shutters slammed shut with cracks and crevices sealed tight.

Spray escaped from the sea in gentle hiccups, collecting in drops, and lifted like a curtain from the watery, bottomless depths. In one breath, an island cloud pushed forward, rising above the cliffs and past the port of boats sloshing in waves of rolling glass hills.

“Get back. Run.”

Alana perched on a rock like a bird inspecting her prey, her emerald eyes, jewels of wisdom. She was never afraid.


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50 thoughts on “The Mist Arrives – Friday Fictioneers

  1. Holy cow. I love this!! It’s like a teaser on a book jacket. It tells you what the book is going to unravel for you. And now I want to read this book. Where is this book?! “…like a bird inspecting her pray…” Perfection.

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    1. Wow. Thanks so much, Jen!! Thanks for your enthusiasm. I really appreciate it. This has been brewing for a little while. I’m so thankful for these water drops on the leaf. It’s just what I needed to stir up some visuals around this. We shall see. If there’s a book, believe me, I’ll let you know. 🙂


  2. You’ve written something very sensual, in the way that it fills the senses. We feel the mysterious mist. I love that it “hiccups.” Wow. Perfect word. We see her perching. We feel the people’s fear and her eerie calm. Amazing.


  3. Love this – love the imagery with the sea. Got the sense that Alana was perched high over the water – like she’s some sort of creature. Don’t know if I’m on the same page as you are, but my imagination was spinning with this one! 🙂

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  4. Reminds of that creepy Stephen King film The Mist. The film wasn’t much good but the original story was great. Anything that reminds me of King has to be excellent!! Nice one.

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    1. Is that the one when they are stuck in the store? I think I saw the movie, so I definitely want to check out the story. That’s high praise, indeed! Thanks, JD!


  5. Hmm, very intriguing, Amy. I immediately thought of the mist as a harbinger of horror, and I guess the people in the town did too. Is Alana a character you have used before? I can’t remember offhand. She sounds like an interesting character.


    1. Thanks, David! The mist is definitely something to be feared. I saw the picture in my mind quite clearly, so my challenge for myself was to translate it into words. Alana has never made an appearance. I’m glad you found her interesting.

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  6. I’m wondering why Alana’s not afraid. There must be some ancient tale about the mist and what it brings. Sounds alien. Well done, Amy. Good tension. 🙂 — Suzanne


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