Princess of the Lily – Friday Fictioneers


It’s time for Friday Fictioneers, a weekly writing group challenged to write a 100-word story based on a photo prompt. Thank you to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for her dedicated leadership and to Erin Leary for this week’s beautiful photo.

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PHOTO PROMPT © Erin Leary

 

Genre: Horror (100 words)

Princess of the Lily

Lily pads floated like majestic crowns.  The lake was Alice’s special place and a much-needed distraction from Sabrina’s sneering. Circuitous pathways weren’t enough. Sabrina tailed her.

Out from the bushes, Sabrina appeared. She said, “Your mother’s schizophrenic. I heard she’s in a mental hospital.”

“You heard wrong,” Alice said.

Sabrina pulled Alice by her hair, plunging her face into the water.

When she surfaced, Alice gasped. “You just made my mother very angry.”

Vines ripped through the ground, pinning Sabrina’s ankles, and yanking her to the muddy depths.

Alice placed a lily pad on her head and blew a kiss.

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64 thoughts on “Princess of the Lily – Friday Fictioneers

  1. Dear Amy,

    I’m guessing that Alice and her mother are one and the same? Actually I’m not all that sure about Sabrina. Intriguing, if not visceral tale. One suggestion. You could easily lose ‘a’ before schizophrenic and be down to an even 100. 😉 Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Rochelle,
      The mother actually is a ghost in the lake. She’s Queen of the Lily! And Sabrina…she’s just a very mean girl. Oh, and I reworked this so many times and never once thought of losing that ‘a.’ Perfect. Thank you. 🙂

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      1. (Jaysus, Jim! Reading this back to myself it sounds like a “piss off,” like I’m saying 100-word stories are defective or “less than” any other form of story when I meant no such pejorative.)

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      2. It is a little like that, but they don’t always fit so perfectly because of the limited words. There’s the story and then how its told. I am still really challenged by the latter.

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  2. Never mess with Alice and her mum. Great, imaginative story, especially with the final touch. I love it, makes you think. I’m slightly appalled by myself for finding mean Sabrina’s death so gratifying.

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  3. Great story, Amy. I love how the sentence “You heard wrong” takes on a more ominous tone once you know the whole story. I don’t think Sabrina will be bothering her again after that, at least not near the lake.
    -David

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    1. Thanks, David. I’m glad that came across with that sentence. Certainly not since Sabrina is now in the lake. (I hope that was clear). Perhaps, she’s a nice little snack for Alice’s mother.

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  4. There’s so much to think about here! I read this more as a fantastical piece, with what happened with the vines. Maybe the lily pads took my mind there right away as well, since I’ve always associated them with fantasy stories. I’m also curious as to what the backstory is with the two girls. Great work as always, Amy! xo

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