Broken – Friday Fictioneers

Happy Friday Fictioneers. Thanks to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for leading and hosting the group. This week’s photo was provided by J. Hardy Carroll. Thank you.

Friday Fictioneers is a writing group, challenged to write a 100-word story based on a photo. My 99-word story follows.

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PHOTO PROMPT © J Hardy Carroll

(99 words)

Broken

Deviant delinquents and abandoned outcasts walk the path to the Farley Home for Boys. They arrive in a room no bigger than a doorway for processing. A narrow table. One chair for staff. They stand. Their words are few, for they are trapped within themselves, buried or beyond reach.

Stripped bare, they swim in a vast vat of liquids filled with chemicals. On cold, blood-spattered tile, they are pricked and prodded with needles.  After a period of isolation, they join the broken.

They etch their names outside on the walls of brick, visible scars of the hurt drowned inside.

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61 thoughts on “Broken – Friday Fictioneers

  1. Feels like the apocalypse just happened, a few unlucky sots survived, and when they came to, this is what they awoke to.

    Swimming in chemicals… that evokes quite an image. Reminds me of that weirdo (and also horrible) Scarlett Johannsen movie where she lures men into an inky black pool that melts out their innards. I’d rather watch your version of that.

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    1. Thanks, Trent. I think this is one of more dark pieces. It’s worse when these things happen to young people, even if they went down the wrong path in life. It makes it worse actually. I’ve never seen that movie I don’t think. That sounds pretty ghastly. Chemicals could be horrific too. I appreciate the compliment that mine wins! 🙂

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  2. Good Lord, Amy! That’s some horrendous processing! Love everything about this! Very strong imagery. That building definitely evokes unsettling feelings – like it definitely could have housed tortured souls… love your take on it! xo

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    1. What a terrible way to begin, right? They must think they’ve entered a torture chamber. Unsettling is a great way to describe this photo prompt. I totally agree. Thanks so much for your feedback and your lovely comments, Kelly. xox

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  3. A bath and inoculations are one thing. What worries the heck out of me are the “blood-spattered floors. It sounds like some kind of horrendous, torturous sect that’s gathered them in with a promise of sanctuary then beats the heck out of them to make them completely submissive. Well done, Amy. —- Suzanne

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    1. I agree it doesn’t conjure very pleasant images. I think anything could go in this place, Suzanne, like the things you describe. Thanks for much for your thoughtful comments. Glad you liked my story.

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